Dan's Otherworldly Dungeon [Dungeon Creation/Exploration Litrpg]

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Description

Dan wakes up in a dark void with an all-powerful World God claiming that Dan is actually a fallen Eldritch God—and that he now has to save the world… from himself.

With his so-called “Eldritch Memories” missing after his supposed defeat, Dan has no idea what’s going on. His brilliant solution? Build a dungeon. Sure, his dungeon system might be clunky, and the meddling creator of the universe clearly has way too much free time, but hey—mana doesn’t farm itself.

Of course, building a dungeon isn't simple. To succeed, Dan must conquer the shattered space he created, reclaim his lost memories, and—most importantly—craft a dungeon so enticing that adventurers can’t resist diving in. After all, one thing a Dungeon God can never have enough of is mana.

This Story is a Work in Progress and it may be subject and has been subject to edits and other changes.

A dungeon story I have always wanted to read.

I have a long story planned and will tell it in stages.

1. Chapters Showing Dan Conquering New Shattered Lands. (Chapters 1-70)2. Chapters giving a rundown of how Dan builds a dungeon floor. (Chapters 71-102)3. Chapters of a group of adventurers exploring the newly built dungeon floor. (Chapters 103+)4. Repeat.

Warning -A large portion of the story is told through the perspective of the dungeon (Dan). It is a story as he witnesses the events and goes through stages 1 and 2. There is a lot of text that consists solely of Dan's thoughts as he experiences and builds the dungeon. If you're looking for more dungeon interaction between the dungeon and its monsters, this isn't it.

New chapters are released on Tuesdays.

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Information

Status: Ongoing
Year: 2024
Author: Mirplet

Chapters(152 total)

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Community Reviews(9)

AKArmbrustRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I quite enjoyed this story. 'Dungeon-core' type stories are not my normal fare but I did find it engaging. Let's break it down into the component parts:Style:The formatting is easy to follow, particularly with regards to the more 'LitRPG' table formatting. Indeed, the '🔷 Crystal Notice 🔷'designators do not appear to use a table at all and yet are still easy to read.I'll also note that the story makes a nice use of maps. In fact, it could probably use more.Story-wise, the narrative starts with an effective use of in medias res. It then goes rapidly through some 'state changes' in our protagonist, but at no point would I say the action is ever confusing.In terms ofCharacterwe primarily have our titular protagonist. And I will say the narrative does a good job of getting into the head of an otherwise eldritch godly being. There's also a steadily growing supply of minions who have more subtle personality quirks. The story succeeds at humanizing a once-human, current eldritch dungeon-being.Grammaticallythere are a few occasional mistakes, some places that could use an extra comma for clarification, etc. But at no point would I say it detracts from the experience.(Apparently, I don't need a premium account to do 'advanced reviews'. I was going to use this bit at the end promising to come back and provide an even more thorough review later. Instead, allow me to highlight a scene around chapter 17 where Dan's minions suplex a bear. That's pretty sick.)
GoldenGamer69Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
It's good. The grammar is good in my opinion, because I have not noticed any grammar mistakes. The world itself is unique and interesting. The characters have depth and the world building is interesting. Where i find it interesting is the concept. The maps in the notes also give some flavor. I would recommend it whole heartedly.
dedeegoRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I had no idea what dungeon core was but after reading this, I understand the draw. The best thing I can say is that I got pulled in and kept reading. I could literally imagine that this was a video game come to life.Edit: I forgot about the maps! So helpful and a great touch!StyleI enjoyed having the MC’s personality as a human come out when he becomes a dungeon. The writing is quick and describes where it needs to while not bogging us down with flowery language. It’s clear in terms of what is happening. And there’s something endearing about the monster creation. For example, “Chomper the Worm!”StoryThe story feels like a slow burn at first but it gives you time to get used to the system. Dungeon core fans might think different but I needed that time. It really picks up in terms of depth when we meet the druids. There’s a female character upfront that I would have loved to hear more from but I expect her to get more involved as I read.CharacterAm I supposed to enjoy the monsters this much? Well, I am. Maybe that strange but I started to really get into the bond and interactions. The MC is very pragmatic, which I get and appreciate. But the characters are fun and serious at the same time.GrammarOnly some minor issues I only noticed because I wanted to give an in depth review. I’m only subtracting half a point because I don’t want to be accused of faking this review so I had to be nitpicky somewhere. But nothing in the grammar affects the experience.like I said, I don’t know how dungeon code aficionados would rate this. But for my first foray into the sub genre, I’m glad I did! Consider me a regular reader.
ashenCombatantRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
At first, I thought the pacing was super weird. The first few chapters are this mass collecting of strength, which makes enough sense, as Dan is a human tapping into his latent eldritch god powers to get strong enough to fight himself. It makes context in story, and is well laid out why and how. The first like 6 monsters were all boss level, and then the plan was to go to war and save the world.But than the didn't happen.And actually im thankful for it. The pacing slowed way down, and the story became not one of just flexing incredible strength, but information gathering and practicing the skills to make sure when the fight does come its winnable. Its a really similar pacing to the anime Overlord, where you see all this strength and unlimited power, but hold on, 'we dont know if the enemy is stronger so we need to be careful.' Forcing the use of tactics and planning, for the dungeon to struggle and have to create just in hopes of surviving.Not quite 5 stars, since there are a few sections descriptions are a little flat, and word choice is repetitive, and the change of pacing is a little sharp, but its nothing that destroyed my immersion.
ShadowOfWarRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
YOOO, what is this? I just started reading this and it's already a massive W. imma keep readin dis cz it seems genuinly good, there is no cringe for the moment, it's clean, smooth and fun to read and is just good overall. I don't get bored reading this and this does things that many other dungeon core novels don't do. The grammar is also good.
KirbyRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
For me, Dan the Man is worth the read. But I also think it's not for everybody. I think the goal of every review is to help readers understand what to expect. If you like a book that's heavy in stats and dungeon building, maps and monsters, stat sheets and choices, this read will be satisfying. If you're looking for drama and dialogue between people, you may have to wait until later chapters. I'm only on Chapter 11. There are hints at larger things happening within the world, but as of yet, it's mostly dungeon development.Seeing a map on chapter 2 was an immediate excitement for me. I often think that maps are a great way to see progress, to see potential, and also as a reminder of what has happened.There's going to be quite a bit of monster creation, experimentation and upgrading. There are lots of stats in this text, so make sure that's something you like. I do, personally, and I can tell that there's math/theory behind the scenes. I enjoy trying to decipher the algorithms that go into the min/maxing of progression, and though I'm only on chapter 10, I'm already getting clues to scratch that itch.The style works. It's a healthy mixture of building mystery and lore through little clues as to what could be and clever detail that paints a vivid picture. The grammar is tight. No complaints.I also appreciate any story that understands that costs are more interesting than powers. And the author gets this. To me, this means that things won't be easy. That the MC will have to struggle, weigh costs, and made tough decisions. When an author builds this sort of world, their MC's progress feels real and earned.
Jackboom007Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
It is a very interesting concept and the action is great. The designs are very unique as well. Overall it's a great story so long as you dont mind getting to see the mind of the dungeon as it goes through the design process. If you dont like that sort of thing then just chill out because the action scenes are worth it.
Kyrian ClawraitheRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
The overall idea of this story is interesting, however at least in the first few chapters as that's all I've read there's far too much "telling" rather than "showing" from the phrase "show don't tell". While reading this, my immersion was frequently broken, and often things that only needed a simple explanation were given two paragraphs instead. This story has obviously given a lot of thought, but it feels like too much of that thought and future context was given all at once, rather than being brought up at the time of relevance and as an explanation even when it would've been more effective to both entertain readers and help them understand what's going on.
Happy ReaderRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
This novel has a very interesting concept but unfortunately I was forced to stop reading it.Author, please read this review. Your writing style has been criticized in previous reviews for quite some time, and I haven't seen any changes to those criticisms. Don't you plan to deal with the problem?The main problem with this story is the monologue style of storytelling, which is why the title of my review is like that. When reading we lose the feeling we usually feel when reading a novel, the passion and enthusiasm of reading, all because of the storytelling style which is like a morning newspaper.